Hi, I'm Spider-Man, I am going to go on holiday in about 6 minutes. Oh, wait 6 minutes! I need to get to the airport real quick! My flight is in 6 minutes and by car it takes about 1 whole hour because of the traffic. Luckily I am Spider-Man so I can just swing from building to building in only 4 minutes and it takes one minute to go through the queue... so I am all good. I have nothing to worry about. When I arrived at the airport the big speaker came on and said, “Last boarding for Australia.” That was my cue to get moving.
The plane ride was really good for a few hours. When I arrived at the airport, I saw my hotel just across the lake and it was really pretty, vines were hanging off the roof and it was very, very beautiful. When I arrived at the hotel, I set my stuff down and went for a swim in the pool. After my swim, I went back to my room to freshen up and suddenly felt really hungry so I had a Big Mac from McDonald's.
After that there was a big incident on the highway. There was a collision with two cars coming one way and one coming the other. So I rushed out of McDonald's and headed to the highway. When I got to the highway everyone was good. The ambulance is there so I basically went there for nothing. I swung back to my hotel and decided to scratch dinner and jump straight in to bed. By this time I had enough! Goodnight….
cool work bur maybe next time you can describ it more
ReplyDeleteHello, Thomas I like that how you explained your story very clearly and you said, like its 6 minutes before the plane.
ReplyDeleteI’ve done a story just like yours and it has like, superheros in it too, but I was not a superhero.
I think you can use some similes to help the story be more interesting and you can try and not put “I” in every sentence starter.
Hi Thomas! It’s Leon. I love the story you did about The Holiday!
ReplyDeleteIn the lockdown I did the holiday story too. It’s kind of like yours!
Maybe next time you could add more superheros!